My dad
My dad is really cool.He has a great sense of humor.When I was sad he always made me fun and brought happy to me.Then we talk about my plight,give me his opinion but he doesn't force me to do what he wants.He let me decide for myself.When I decided to go back to school for studing English,He disagreed it but still respect my choice and support me to do that.He is a generous and supportive dad that I think he is the best dad in the world.
posted by jesse at 7:24 PM
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My dad is really cool.He has a great sense of humor.When I was sad he always made me fun and brought happy to me.
-->When I was sad, he always made me laugh and brought happiness...
Then we talk about my plight,give me his opinion but he doesn't force me to do what he wants.
-->Should you use past tense here?
He let me decide for myself.When I decided to go back to school for studing English,He disagreed it but still respect my choice and support me to do that.
-->..., he disagreed but still respected...supported...
He is a generous and supportive dad that I think he is the best dad in the world.
-->; I think...
Simple and straightforward! Suggestions: why don't use try to use some exemplifing expressions presented in the textbook?
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